letter
Dear Sir or Madam,
The reason I am addressing you is that the language course is not what I expected. There are many shortcomings in this course and this you please correct me. This in my opinion will be useful for future study.
At the moment, These are the things that are important to your course. Such as not enough clothes rack, electric blackboard, no quality room and no will be quality indication. This is the reason why I am dissatisfied with the course.
I would like to suggest some ways to improve the course. Such as pupil-friendly lessons, and it is necessary to provide comfortable conditions.
If these changes are implemented and improve it will be good. After this course attracts the pupil. It will bring good profit for the center. And this for pupil knowledge benefit.
I look forward to your response. I hope you can address this matter promptly and provide a suitable solution.
Yours faithfully,
M.r, Alpomishov Oybek.
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of the argument and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of your argument.
- Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are only minor errors. However, there is room for improvement in terms of sentence structure and grammatical accuracy.
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single point and is well supported by the rest of the essay.