Line graph
The line graph shows, how to the yearly the number of jobs changed in four different occupants in the years 1960,1980,2000 and 2020. Overall, the Retail and Healthcare occupants gradual rise including in the next two years. But Manufacturing and Agriculture’s occupants decreased about including 60 years. Focusing on the biggest numbers, Retail and Healthcare occupants about 16 mln jobs created between 2000 year and 2020 year. Which was these jobs converted in the 2020 year. But these graph noticeable changes come to in 2020 year. The two graph for the kept increasing to reach on all-time high of 16mln occupants while that for the letter decreased significantly, amounting to more than 10 mln occupants from 1960 to 1980. Manufacturing and Agriculture, while the number of jobs in the field of looking generally decreased. Manufacturing, Despite a significantly increase from 15 mln to 20 mln. Despite levelled of during the next decade.However, the graph increase between 2000 and 2020.
The essay shows an understanding of the basic principles of organization and coherence. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices appropriately.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences within the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling.
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are several grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay addresses the task and provides a basic overview of the information presented in the graph. However, the essay contains several inaccuracies and unclear information.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you accurately describe the information presented in the graph.
- Make sure that you use the correct terminology to describe the data.