Line graph illustrates total exports in four main places (China, USA, Asia without China and Europe union) from 2000 and 2014.
There given the line graph with the information about exported clothes in total between 2000 and 2014.
Overall, it is clear that China as leader in the graph and it managed to became the highest one in exporting system.
In 2000, European countries started exporting clothes from around 32 per cent and it declined by 10 percentage after 4 years. While Chinese’s export system was low than all, and there was dramatic rise between 2000 and 2008. The stats of Europe declined minimally till 17 per cent.
USA was in third place between in three countries and it was probably 12, however it fell to 5% over the period. To compare USA with China, China was more successful in exporting and by the 30% was more than USA. Except China other countries of Asia was also better in internationally trade than USA and China, nevertheless only China managed to growth 2 times more. And Asia without China fluctuated one from 2000 to 2014.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression. Some comparisons are confusing, and the information is not presented in a coherent manner.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay logically, starting with an overview and then detailing each region.
- Use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect or region.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary, and some word choices are awkward or incorrect.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and sentence structures.
The essay attempts to describe the graph but lacks detailed analysis and accurate comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific data points and comparisons.
- Ensure that all regions are accurately described and compared.
- Include more detailed analysis of trends.