Malika
The map describes the office building shape out and current layout plans. Overall, the future plans show marked changes, including the removal of greenery, converted into new facilities, and more functional use of space.
In the present layout, the office has green areas at both east and west sides. The access to the office is from south, with four main offices and reception at the bottom of the map while, the kitchen, canteen and stock room located at the top of the map with the WCs situated at the top right corner.
In the future office will undergone a complete makeover. In particular the most significant change will be reconstruction of the building into modern offices. Additionally, the green area in right side will be knocked down and replaced with meeting erea in the the south and coffee machine and WCs at the north, while the green spaces to its right will be repurchased into an outdoor sitting area. The number and layout offices will change, with the new offices being added to the bottom and left sides of the map.
The essay presents a basic comparison of the current and future layouts. However, the flow of information is somewhat disjointed, and there is a lack of clear linking phrases.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Organize information logically.
- Clarify the sequence of changes.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary, with some repetition and minor errors.
There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed explanations and comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons.
- Include more specific details about changes.