Many elderly people are no long looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays a lot of families are busy with their work and cannot look after their parents, therefore some old generation placed under home care, which it has its benefits and drawbacks.
The foremost advantage is that elderly people will be surrounded with kind and supportive environment. For instance, this environment allows them to create new bond between other members. Hence, retirees will have a sense of fulfillment which is beneficial for their health and well-being. Moreover care homes provide safety, by giving them shelter with trustworthy individuals and with healthy meals. Additionally, when young ones are busy with their work life and cannot spend too much time with their parents, who needs medical attention. So, they can be sent to special nursing homes, where they can live happily and avoid isolation.
On the other hand, the biggest disadvantage of the same trend is that aged individuals face abuse from doctors and nurses. For example, workers at nursing homes might be aggressive because of the long hours and heavy workload. Thus, it can effect in a bad way to elders and they will start to feel both depression and loneliness at the same time. Furthermore, retirees might experience a sense of emotional distance and miss their family or grandchildren. Another possible issue is that teenagers don’t understand the importance of elderly people. As an example, they guide and give life lessons that will be useful in our future lives. Youngsters should recognize and appreciate the significance of elderly people.
To sum up, nursing homes are ubiquitous and can be rewarding and problematic, however this might help to find more friends and, simultaneously, recall special memories.
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