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The maps illustrate the layouts for the conference room in the years of 2009 and 2010. Overall, conference room maintained most of its same features although it underwent several relocations along with additional facilities. Additionally, in 2009, conference room provided more seats for people compared to 2010
In 2009, Access to the conference room was from the top side, whether you could enter it with main or side entrance that were located in the top left and right corner respectively. In the middle of the top side, there was a registration. In the right wing, there was a large balcony adjacent to which was exhibition area. On the opposite side, concert hall and stage were aligned vertically, with former provided four seats, while the letter had the same numbers but for meeting purposes. Lastly, in the center of the map, there is display area that offered three seats.
By 2010, the layout of conference room changed significantly. Access remained the same, yet refreshment was built at the cost of the registration where it was located in the right side of the map at that year. When it comes to right side of the room, most of the changes were made to this side, with stage was relocated to beside the balcony. Seats and concert hall were also come near to the stage. In 2010, in balcony, there was also lougue area. Exhibition area wa
s also relocated to the left wing.
The essay follows a logical structure but lacks clarity in some areas. Transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt, and there are instances of unclear references.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between paragraphs.
- Ensure all references to the map features are precise.
- Avoid abrupt shifts in focus.
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety. Some words are repeated, and there are minor errors in word choice.
There are several grammatical errors, including issues with verb forms and sentence structure. Complex sentences are attempted but not always successful.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and precision in describing changes. Some key features are omitted or inaccurately described.
Suggestions
- Include more precise descriptions of changes.
- Ensure all key features from the map are mentioned.
- Provide a clearer overview of the differences between the two years.