Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be taken as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
In the present, online courses are becoming popular, even though there are some thoughts that education at a college or university cannot be replaced by online education. I partially agree with this statement, as several specialities cannot be taught in distance.
It is noticed that in 21-st century more and more modern specialties are being found, such as mobilogorapher, social media market specialist, facebook,instagram, tik-tok marketers, programmes, designers, which should not be learned in traditional ways. Except high schools and colleges, where the older generation used to study, nowadays, the majority of well experienced people sell their online courses to share their knowledge, and these programs normally cost less than education at university. Additionally, people who prefer modern programs think that programs offered by university also include unnecessary subjects to learn, which are not related to the future sphere.
However, universities and colleges are also needed for some special directions, such as medicine, jurisprudence and law, mechanics and others. With taking medicine as an example, doctors should be taught in real practice in an audience, not in distance, because they work with people and humans organism cannot be imitated with any modern devices, feelings also cannot be replaced.
To conclude, there should be also added that everything in this world depends on different cases, where a single way to solve the problem does not exist, therefore arguing in any topic is nonsense, because a single form of people is individual, which also means unique.
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and clearly stating the overall stance on the issue.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and clearly state your position on the issue.
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure that could be revised for clarity and accuracy. The essay demonstrates a good control of a wide range of grammatical structures, with only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples.
Suggestions
- Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that all the information in the paragraph supports this topic sentence.