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The line graph compares the proportion of clothing exports from China, the European Union, Asia (excluding China), and the USA over a 14-year period. Overall, China remained the dominant clothing exporter throughout the period, with its share increasing steadily. In contrast, the figures for the European Union, Asia, and the USA all showed a downward trend.
In 2000, the European Union accounted for approximately 33% of global clothing exports, making it the largest exporter at the start of the period. Asia(excluding China) followed closely with about 30%, while China and the USA contributed around 14% and 11%, respectively. By 2008, the proportion of clothing exports from China had risen to 25%, overtaking the European Union, which had declined to roughly 27%. The share of exports from Asia declined slightly to 18%, while the USA experienced a small drop to 9%.
By 2014, the proportion of clothing exports from China had reached a peak of nearly 36%, making it by far the largest exporter. In contrast, the shares for the European Union and Asia both fell significantly, ending at around 22% and 20%. The USA witnessed a more gradual decline, with its export share decreasing by 2% to finish at 7%.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the trends. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the changes in the data over time. However, there are a few areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to make the relationships between the ideas clearer.
- Consider using more varied linking words to connect your ideas and make the text flow more smoothly.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary to describe the data and trends. The language is generally precise and appropriate for the task. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a wide range of grammatical structures to describe the data and trends. The sentences are generally well-formed and free from major errors. However, there are a few instances where the grammar could be improved for better clarity.
The essay provides a clear and detailed overview of the information presented in the graph. The key features and trends are identified and described effectively. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific data to support the comparisons and descriptions.
Suggestions
- Include specific data to support your comparisons and descriptions. For example, when stating that China remained the dominant clothing exporter, provide the exact percentage increase over the years.