Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017)

The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017, divided into three categories: visitors staying on cruise ships, visitors staying on the island, and the total number of visitors.
Overall, the total number of tourists visiting the Caribbean island increased significantly in the given period. While the number of visitors staying on cruise ships experienced a steady rise, those staying on the island grew more gradually.
In detail, the figure for Total accounted for just 1 million in 2010 and this was followed by a gradual growth to roughly 2.7 million in 2016. Additionally, a dramatic rise was seen in its figure during the end of the period. Similarly, the cruise ships’ visitors reached approximately 0.6 million in the initial year, before increasing to around 1.3 million visitors in 2016 which was 1.5 in the final year.
In terms of tourists to the island, there were, normal people who went to the island, seen in its figure with nearly 0.6 million which leveled off by the next year. However, it Improved further to 1.2 million visitors in 2016, before reaching 1.5 million in the final year.

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