Nurmuhammad
The illustration represents changes in the town of Kimsville which has developed in these days. There have been several changes and then i will discuss in the following paragraphs.
Since 2002, there have been noticeable changes with new residential and commercial areas replacing older industrial structures. Additionally, the transportation infrastructure has also been improved with the construction of the new train station addition of a new road leading to the train station.
In 2002, the town had the old cinema which has been transformed into a pub and new apartments have been constructed in the area. Previously, the town had a factory located near the city center, which has been replaced by a new train station. Furthermore, the town now has a football stadium, which was not there in 2002. A new software company has also been constructed in the city, replacing the area where there were trees. However, the mall remained unchanged.
The essay presents information logically, but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Avoid repetition of similar ideas.
Vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision in some areas.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing the main changes depicted in the illustration.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data from the illustration to support descriptions.