Percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features.
The table shows the percentage of people using mobile phone features in 2006, 2008, and 2010.
Overall, the percentage of people who used the Make Calls was the highest score among other categories, while the worst figure was the Record video in the table.
Turning to the specifics, in 2006 make calls were the dominant figure with 100%, which was the highest figure in the first year. Second place took Text messages was 73%. The percentage of people using Take Photos was 66%. The percentage of people using play gaming was 17%, a figure which is slightly higher 5% than play music. As for the internet and record video, both of them had no data.
By 2008, the leader figure was making calls, that figure was dominant last year. The percentage of people using text messages was 75%, which was the second figure in like 2006 years. The percentage of people using take photo was 71%. There was a slight disparity in the figures for play game and the internet about 42% and 41% respectively. The percentage of people using play music was 18%, that figure was two times more than recording video.
As for 2010, the percentage of people using making calls was 99%, which was the highest figure in this year. Second place was text messaging at 79%. Notably, the percentage of people using take photos was 76%, that figure was the highest 3% of than internet. The percentage of people using play games is 41%. After that figure was recorded video at 35%.
The percentage of people using play music was 26%, which was the lowest figure in 2010.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are issues with clarity and transitions.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary but lacks variety and precision in some areas.
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The essay addresses the task but lacks precision in some descriptions and comparisons.
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