Pie chart
The pie charts detail how much different nutrients, which can damage the health when consumed overly, the average American eats in each meal and snacks on a daily basis. The units are measured in percentagewise.
Overall, sodium and saturated fat are mostly included in meals served in dinner, while added sugar is largely consumed with snacks. Additionally, these nutrients are commonly found in different amounts in lunch and breakfast a person has in the United States.
As for the sodium intake, it is included in breakfast and snacks equally, with 14 percents, and that of the two together makes up about lunch’s proportion. 43 percent of the breakfast is comprised of sodium, which could be harmful to one’s well-being.
The same can be seen in saturated fat,as it is also actively consumed in dinner time, with 37 percent of it being consisted of fat. This nutrient constitutes the 21 and 16 percent of light meals and breakfast, respectively. In addition, approximately a quarter of lunch is made with saturated fat.
When it comes to the added sugar, its inclusion patterns are different. The percentage of this sugar in lunch intake is exactly 19 percent, which is higher than that of breakfast meals with a small margin of three percent.
The essay presents information logically but lacks clear organization in some parts. Some sentences are not well-connected, affecting the flow.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some inaccuracies and repetitions occur.
The essay demonstrates a fair range of grammatical structures but contains errors that affect clarity.
The essay covers the main points but includes some inaccuracies and lacks depth in analysis.
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- Ensure accurate representation of data.
- Provide a more detailed analysis of each nutrient.
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