Pie chart
The pie charts provide data about the proportion of main methods of transportation used by people in forms of reaching their destination namely workplace or studying between 2004 and 2009.
Overall, over the given period, individuals travelled to university for work or skudy by all of them. There was upward trend in method of car while travelling by bus witnessed decline through the given period.
In 2004, the transport that was the most popular for people was car and the proportion of this transport was 51%. This number, however, declined significantly to 23 % in 2009 due to parking changes. before a year. Additionally, the proportion of train which was the smallest percentage Of total, rose slightly to just 1% through 5 years. As for other types of transports, there were three methods which experienced different changes within 5years .There was an increase in vehicle of bus from 33% to 46% in 2009 because of new bus stop at university from 2006. Meanwhile, Walking and bicycle increased to 6% and 16% from 4% and 9% respectively
The essay lacks clear organization and logical flow. There are inconsistencies in the data presented, and the overall structure is not well-defined.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
- Ensure data presented matches the pie charts.
- Use linking words to improve flow.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some inaccuracies.
The essay contains grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
The essay partially addresses the task but includes inaccuracies in data interpretation.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data matches the information in the charts.
- Provide a clear overview of the main trends and changes.