Pie chart
The pie charts provide data about the proportion of main methods of transportation used by people in forms of reaching their destination namely workplace or studying between 2004 and 2009.
Overall, over the given period, individuals travelled to university for work or skudy by all of them. There was upward trend in method of car while travelling by bus witnessed decline through the given period.
In 2004, the transport that was the most popular for people was car and the proportion of this transport was 51%. This number, however, declined significantly to 23 % in 2009 due to parking changes. before a year. Additionally, the proportion of train which was the smallest percentage Of total, rose slightly to just 1% through 5 years. As for other types of transports, there were three methods which experienced different changes within 5years .There was an increase in vehicle of bus from 33% to 46% in 2009 because of new bus stop at university from 2006. Meanwhile, Walking and bicycle increased to 6% and 16% from 4% and 9% respectively
The essay lacks clarity and logical flow. There are inconsistencies in describing trends and changes over time.
Suggestions
- Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph.
- Ensure logical flow by using appropriate linking words.
- Avoid contradictions in data interpretation.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors.
There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay partially addresses the task but contains inaccuracies in data interpretation and lacks a clear overview.
Suggestions
- Ensure accurate interpretation of the data.
- Provide a clear and concise overview of the main trends.
- Include specific data points to support statements.