PIE CHART
The pie charts detail information about the reasons why people choose to either drive or cycle to work.
Overall, it is clear that health and environmental factors are the primary reasons for people to opt for cycling, whereas safety and traveling distance are the main considerations for drivers. Other factors are less significant than those aforementioned.
As for cycling, health/fitness, as well as reducing pollution are the primary factors for people to prefer each accounting for 30%. Avoiding parking problems is also highly appreciated by 15% of people who opt to ride bicycles to their workplaces. Similarly, financial savings and speed dominance in comparison to cars are also popular motives for cyclists, with respective figures of 13% and 12% of individuals preferring them.
Regarding car motives, convenience is of great importance for drivers to choose cars, with a staggering 40% of responses. Traveling distance to work is also a favorite reason, but not as popular as comfort. Having to deal with carrying items to work and being faster than bikes show similar figures, both of which account for 14%. And finally, safety over cycling makes up a mere 11 % of respondents claiming that it is a key factor.
The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphs and logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary accurately, though it could benefit from more variety.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing key information from the pie charts.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data points are accurately represented.