Process
The pictures show the process of making smoked fish.
Overall, there are three main stages, starting with catching fish and transporting them followed by smoking and packing them and lastly storing and distribution of the product to shop. It is also clear that the majority of the process is completed manually with relativaly little equipment.
Before fish is smoked, they go through a number of steps.First of all the fish is caught using fishing nets and transported to the port. To keep fish fresh, it is then frozen in a container. When at the processing facility the fish undergoes a thawing process in fresh water. After thawing the fish is cut open to remove the unnecessary ports including guts and bones. The cleaned fish is then socked in a salt water solution which also contains some yellow coloring. Ultimately the fish is ready to be smoked.
The next stage of the process begins when the smoked fish is packaged and then frozen at zero Celsius degree in a larger container. This container is kept in a cold storage before it is ready for distribution across fish shop, where it is finally sold to customers.
The essay generally follows a logical sequence and structure, but there are some minor issues with flow and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps more clearly.
- Ensure each stage is distinctly outlined.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some errors and repetitions.
There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity and accuracy of the essay.
The essay addresses the task and provides an overview of the process, but some details are either missing or inaccurately described.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details from the diagram.
- Ensure all steps are accurately described.