Many people all around the world lead an unhealthy lifestyle despite the various researches that good activities can enhance the quality of their life. Some causes of such behaviour can be connected with the lack of time to lead a healthy lifestyle. One of the best solutions to address the problem is to change the role model people encounter every day.
Regarding the causes, nowadays many individuals are not engaged in healthy activities because they do not have enough time to include them into their routine. The problem worsens by advertising that persuades people to buy fast food because it demands less time and efforts to prepare. Thus, people choose to avoid stress, save time for pleasure and prioritise other activities over healthy ones that require strength, time and efforts to maintain.
As for solutions, the government should promote a healthy lifestyle through television and the Internet. It is not a good idea to deter people by bad healthy outcomes as it used to be some years ago. On the contrary, we need to change the policy and surround people with good examples in order for individuals to start to think how they can improve their lives. The environment plays a pivotal role in good changings. For instance, many of my friends decided to go to the gym and eat healthy food. I was surrounded with people who were eager to change the way they had lived before. As a consequence, I started exercising every week. The role model we see in everyday life has a strong impact on our way of thinking. In order to change something, people should start with the environment.
Overall, nowadays our society gradually changes for the better. Various trends according to a healthy lifestyle occur in social media almost every week. People begin to think about outcomes they may face in the future if they do not change anything now and it is a good direction for further development.
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