Rubbish
At this time almost people needs from make a packaging, not expect food and water. Every people need food and water, everyday they buy the food and water in package. This package can causes the rubbish whatever this a organic rubbish or anorganic rubbish. different between organic rubbish and anorganic is recycling process. Organic rubbish can destroy by selft and can use for fertilizer where as anorganic rubbish the cannot destroy and still do not change. For example the plastic bottle in the deep sea until some years it will be not destroy and make pollution in the sea and bother sea ecosistem. Packaging food using anorganic material causes issue about anorganic rubbish. the governance about anorganic rubbish be expected can decrase rubbish in neighborhood. this is the government about rubbish that implement :
1. Make no plastic bag to packaging, some store make government to limitation plastic bag and not give the plastic bag to their customers. though the some difficult to take they buy but th
2. Ssing self bottle for dring and not dring from bottled water
3. Recycling anorganic rubbish
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The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the organization of ideas is not clear. There is no logical progression in the discussion, making it difficult to follow. The use of connectors and cohesive devices is minimal, and some are used inaccurately, further confusing the reader. The essay lacks paragraphs, which would help in organizing the information and separating different ideas.
Suggestions
- Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and make the text more readable.
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas more clearly.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are several inaccuracies in word choice and spelling. Some words are repeated, and there is no effort to use synonyms to diversify the language. The essay also uses informal language, which is not appropriate for an academic task like the IELTS writing task. There are numerous spelling mistakes that can hinder understanding.
The essay shows a very limited control of grammatical structures. There are numerous errors in sentence structure, verb forms, and agreement. Punctuation is often missing or used incorrectly, further affecting the clarity of the text. Some sentences are overly long and convoluted, making them difficult to understand.
The essay does not address the task adequately. It seems to discuss the topic of waste and packaging, but the position is unclear and the ideas are not well developed. The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, and the body paragraphs do not have a clear structure. There is no thesis statement, and the essay does not provide any arguments or examples to support the main idea.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you understand the task and maintain a clear position throughout the essay.
- Develop your ideas with specific examples and evidence.