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The table and charts provide data about the number of doctors in Australia and their distribution by gender and place of birth across three years: 1986, 1996, and 2006. Overall, the data highlights an increase in the number of doctors, a shift toward gender equality, and a growing share of overseas-born doctors in Australia.
The table reveals a steady increase in the total number of doctors, rising from 23,720 in 1986 to 29,060 in 1996 and reaching 35,450 by 2006.
The bar chart on gender indicates a significant male dominance in 1986, with around 750% of doctors being male and only 25% female. Over the years, the percentage of female doctors rose, narrowing the gap. By 2006, the proportion of male doctors decreased to around 60%, while female doctors accounted for just under 40%, indicating a trend toward gender balance.
Regarding place of birth, the second bar chart shows that in 1986, over 60% of doctors were bor in Australia, while under 40% were born overseas. This trend persisted across the years but with a gradual decrease in the proportion of Australian-born doctors. By 2006, the distribution was even, with 50% of doctors born in Australia and 50% overseas.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information provided in the charts and table. The writer effectively uses cohesive devices to link ideas and creates a coherent flow of information.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to further improve the cohesion of your writing.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures and is generally accurate. However, there are a few minor errors that could be improved.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the charts and tables. The writer effectively summarizes the key trends and makes relevant comparisons where necessary. However, the writer could provide a more detailed analysis in some areas.
Suggestions
- Try to provide a more detailed analysis of the data, where possible. This could involve discussing the significance of the trends or making comparisons to other data.