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Some believe that robots play a crucial role in shaping humanity’s future, whereas others argue that they pose risks and could harm society. Discuss both arguments and present your viewpoint

There is a debate over the relevance of robots in humanity’s future with some deeming them as a potentially important aspect of people’s life while others arguing that artificial intelligence is likely to come with risks and disrupt the function of society. While I acknowledge the key role of robots in forming people’s future such as advancing healthcare and increasing productivity industries, I believe risks – job displacement and ethical issues – caused by them are far more serious.
One of the crucial roles of robots in societies in the future could be the contribution of healthcare. They might support medical professionals in diagnostics, surgeries. In other words, doctors key all the details and information in robots regarding the patients’ circumstances and they analyze the data, consulting doctors to conclude which treatments might be implemented for them. This could ease professionals’ job, eradicating their doubts about the usage of therapies and surgeries or complex operations can be overtaken effectively, minimizing the risks of potentially unsuccessful outcomes.
Productivity in industries could also be enhanced with the help of robots. They have the potential to automate repetitive, hazardous or precision-demanding tasks, especially in manufacturing and construction, boosting efficiency. By contrast, people might be at high risk of harming their health or even costing their lives if they are burdened with such tasks. The quality of products might also be boosted as the process and procedures of manufacturing are carried out by robots with high precision.
These arguments notwithstanding, I think the hazards related to the use of robots are far more significant. First off, they can lead to people’s being out of work in sectors where manual labor is prioritized. Automation and artificial intelligence are likely to replace human workers in manual based sectors as employers do not need to pay them regular payment and worry about the safety. This can result in a huge rise in the unemployment rate in society, disrupting the quality and people’s lifestyle since there is the likelihood of limiting their purchasing abilities.
Ethical and moral concerns should not also be neglected. Autonomous robots might be deployed for bad intentions – by inserting the information about committing a crime they can be turned into a killer, posing risks for people’s life. This means that human rights are in danger of being destroyed, instilling fear and anxiety in the general public. This would result in the disappearance of human interaction and socialization as everyone might have doubts regarding others’ openness, sincerity and honesty.
In conclusion, admittedly there are some positive aspects of using robots in facilitating the procedures in the healthcare system and bolstering the productivity in particularly manufacturing and construction sectors. However, I am of the opinion that hazards related to this development are far more serious given robots’ role in people’s job displacement and jeopardizing their lives.

7.5

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved. Transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother to guide the reader through the argument more effectively. Some sentences are slightly disjointed and could be rephrased for better flow and coherence.

Suggestions
  • Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
  • Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.

The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and accurately. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. Some sentences contain awkward or incorrect word choices that slightly detract from the clarity and effectiveness of the argument. Minor errors in word choice and collocation are present and could be refined for greater precision and impact.

The essay uses a variety of complex structures. The majority of sentences are free of grammatical errors. However, there are a few minor errors that do not significantly impact the overall clarity or readability of the essay. A few grammatical errors are present, such as awkward phrasing, minor errors in subject-verb agreement, and incorrect prepositions. Some sentences are slightly awkwardly phrased and could be streamlined for greater clarity and impact.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. Both sides of the argument are discussed in a balanced way, and the writer’s position is clearly stated and supported. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples to support the arguments.

Suggestions
  • Try to include more specific examples to support your arguments.