Some ex-prisoners commit crimes after being released from prison. What do you think is the cause? How can it be solved?
It is observed that many criminals after leaving their prison , they also try to commit crimes. It is true that they have a criminal activities. in this essay causes and solutions, the best cause opinion in my mind is the job opportunities, it can increase prisoners who can be ex-criminals. The second cause is criminals are not uncontrolled when they reased from prison. Finally cause is peer pressure from everyone to criminals; but this also has factors and measures , additionally they try to be good people and government should increase jobs for everyone and concentrate criminals next life . They should find or business for their interests or needs. Another measure is ex-prisoners should increase a personal attention and change their focus by them and their relatives. And also finally solution is not only government but also people should adopt this position, give them second opportunity and decrease peer pressure, instead of this – learn ex-criminals geniu interests and lead to pure life .If peer pressure is increased ,they lose their motivation. None of them would not the bad life .
In conclusion, all of government, people, criminals and their relatives try to live well life it can be great for all
The essay is somewhat organized, but the flow of ideas is not entirely clear. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and lacks variety, which can make the essay feel disjointed. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and providing a clear final thought.
Suggestions
- Try to vary your use of cohesive devices to create a smoother flow of ideas.
- Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your essay.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases. Additionally, the use of synonyms could be improved to avoid repetition.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions, which can make it difficult to understand the intended meaning. Additionally, there are some errors in verb tense and subject-verb agreement that can be distracting.
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the causes and potential solutions for ex-criminals’ behavior. However, the ideas are not fully developed, and the essay could benefit from more specific examples and a deeper analysis of the proposed solutions. Additionally, the conclusion is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you fully develop your ideas and provide specific examples to support your points.
- Consider providing a more concise and direct conclusion that summarizes the main points of your essay.