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Some people believe that is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In an era characterized by escalating environmental issues, the question of whether who should be in charge of protecting the environment, the individuals or the governments , has gained traction. While the role played by each is undeniable, I assert that one alone fails to keep the atmosphere clean.
Proponents of individuals are responsible for protecting the environment cite various reasons to support their stance. They claim that the small acts of people have a lot to do with the safety of the environment. Not only do they have to avoid throwing litter away , damaging or cutting trees or even using water more than they need , but can they also play an indispensable role reminding the consequences of treating the environment badly when they see someone throwing their litter mindlessly and in enhancing the quality of the greenery in a country by planting more trees and looking after them consistently and by curbing the use of domestic water , they can be the ultimate savers of the ecosystem. Given the rise of mountain-sized landfills, destruction, and drying oceans , individuals can put an end to the problems associated with the environment with their small yet significant acts.
In addition, there are some people considering the governments to be in charge of the environment. Of the various possible factors , one is the sufficient fund that the government can allocate to preserve and protect the environment. The establishment of cities with the most greenery is often relied heavily upon the governments to finance it as large sums of money is required to make a place eco-friendlier from planting trees to maintaining roads safer . Beyond the financial contribution of the governments, the view of the enforcement of rules and regulations to protect the environment should also be taken into consideration. Imposing stringent financial punishments on people who do a harm to the environment, say , cut a tree or throw away their litter can be an excellent governmentmental initiative for the better preserved environment.
However, I personally contend that arguing who should be the one to preserve the environment is unpractical and thus both individuals and the government have the united power to protect our lives – the environment. If individuals alone are considered to be the sole environment savers, problems without the financial help of the governments to carry out environmental projects cannot be solved . Or even though the governments fund and protect the environment, the unconscious acts of people may still intensity the problems that the government tries to solve . In short, it is , in my opinion, nearly impossible to keep the environment safe without mutual cooperation.
In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I believe that the roles play by both parties are equally important in preserving and protecting the environment.

7.5

The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected well. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction sets up the topic well, but the connection between different points could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to improve the flow of ideas.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary related to the environment. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more specific examples could enhance the argument.

The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, which adds variety and interest. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more specific examples could enhance the argument.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing both individual and government responsibility for protecting the environment. The writer presents a clear position that both individuals and governments are important in preserving the environment. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.

Suggestions
  • Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single point.
  • Consider providing more specific examples to support your arguments.