Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a debate over who should bear the responsibility of packaged products. With some saying Manufacturers and shopping malls and others arguing that it is us who should be responsible for what we buy. Although there are some justifying the responsibility of people. It is the shops and companies which should shoulder the responsibility of packaged products.
Some think that people should take the less packaging of their products into consideration when buying. It is thought that they would cause more and more pollution taking place throughout the world. Most of environmentalists blame people for causing these problems via shopping more packaged products, such as crisps, junk food and the products of similar nature. People truly play a role on pollution chai, but they wouldn’t have got involved if the markets sold less packaged things.
However, people should be free from accusations as they have no choice, but to buy what the shops and the manufacturers offer. Instead they should be given an instructions through specific TV programs or shop assistants what kind of damages do these things pose for our Environment and even translate into lose the part of motherly nature. These would be more sensible course of action.
On a more personal level, manufacturers and shopping places are the main part of the issue driving us to pollute more. As people are the main source of the income for them so they try to offer us their products however they prefer mostly via advertisement and Sales. Take my country-Uzbekistan. Everything single product leaving the shelves of the Markets have at least one thing of packaging if not more. We need involvement of special government officials to come up with a rule, stating the obligation of selling and making less packaging involved products.
In Conclusion, although people have a little bit of involvement in pollution issue, I believe manufacturers and Sellers play a vital Role In This specific problem as they try selling their possessions in their market through different ways

6.5

The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a standard structure, but the introduction is somewhat confusing. The use of cohesive devices is sometimes awkward, and there are some issues with paragraphing. However, the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.

Suggestions

Try to use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central topic and follows logically from the previous one.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay uses a variety of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases. More precise and varied vocabulary would enhance the essay. Additionally, a more formal tone is required.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and some sentences are difficult to understand. The essay contains several grammatical errors that can cause some difficulty for the reader. More attention to grammar and sentence structure is needed. Proofreading for errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling is recommended.

The essay addresses the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The essay addresses the task and presents a clear position. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.