Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some propose that the ones who should take the lead in diminishing the amount of packaging of products are producers and markets, while others support the view that they are actually customers who ought to evade purchasing goods which include excessive packaging. As I believe that this issue can be dealt with the former perception since factories and markets are the root cause of this; however, customers’ avoidance in buying packaging goods can also be helpful.
On the one hand, some promote the idea that the responsibility of reducing the amount of packaging of goods lies with consumers, who actually are the main reason why over-packaging is increasing. Relentless clients’ demands towards buying products that are overly packaged or not sustainable let manufacturers increase the production of these goods. If a customer had taken personal responsibility by evading products that comprise the packaging process and had opted instead for those with sustainable and recyclable packaging, there would not be such an amount of over-packaging, and also the environment would not be damaged like that. Clients should resist the urge to buy non-sustainable products; in turn, since markets are filled with goods that are desired by customers, they would cease providing their customers with this kind of product.
On the other hand, the proponents of the former stance, including me, think that the pivotal role in decreasing the amount of over-packaging is mainly played by manufacturers and shops themselves. These factories are the root reason for this issue; for example, plastic bags are one of the unrecyclable products and harm the environment if thrown away. In order to remedy this, they should switch this non-sustainable packaging into recyclable products, which are harmless to the environment. Furthermore, if manufacturers are concerned that these eco-friendly products may not catch their customers’ attention, the innovative technologies will be used for designing and making their appearances as remarkable as packaging products. I contend that avoidance of buying packaging things in customers as helpful may seem, this growing issue is mainly the liability of manufacturers and shops.
In conclusion, while consumers do play a role in minimizing the amount of packaging waste, the primary responsibility lies with producers and shops. In my view, only when factories halt producing non-sustainable packaging and replace them with eco-friendly goods, this growing debate can be tackled.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
- Ensure that your arguments are presented in a clear and concise manner.
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. A few less common words or phrases are used, and there is a good use of less common vocabulary. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. The majority of sentences are error-free, and punctuation is well managed. However, there are a few minor errors that do not impede communication.
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. Both sides of the argument are discussed in detail, and the writer’s opinion is clearly stated. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples to support the arguments.
Suggestions
- Try to include more specific examples to support your arguments. This will make your writing more persuasive and help to provide a clearer illustration of your points.