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Some people say that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have different views as to whether economic success can co-exist with a clean and healthy environment. While economic growth is likely to present serious environmental problems, I believe that it is ultimately beneficial for the natural environment.
Critics of economic development cite various reasons to support their stance. When countries prioritize developing economically, they often carry out infrastructural expansions like new roads, skyscrapers, and factories, all of which require the removal of forests and green spaces, as well as the destruction of natural habits. This process not only increases the amount of greenhouse gas emissions in the atmosphere but also endangers multiple species of wild animals and plants, thereby worsening air quality and biodiversity. In a world where environmental issues like air pollution, ozone layer depletion, and animal extinction have spiraled out of control, the focus on economic development might further deplete natural resources, disrupt ecosystems, and accelerate the adverse effects of climate change.
However, in my view, it is possible to strike a harmonious balance between economic prosperity and environmental sustainability. If governments continue to increase their GDP and generate revenue, they are likely to make progress across various fields like transport, manufacturing, science and technology, which paves the way for the development of green technologies like electric cars, renewable energy sources such as solar and wind, sustainable land management practices, and efficient public transport networks. These advancements allow them to conserve invaluable natural resources and minimize greenhouse gases, potentially promoting ecological integrity and environmental recovery. A case in point is my home country of Uzbekistan, where economic success has enabled local authorities to implement effective waste management techniques like recycling, alleviating the greenhouse effect and improving the quality of air.
In conclusion, although legitimate concerns exist regarding the impact of economic growth on air quality and biodiversity, I contend that the economic objectives of a country do not interfere with its environmental values. Only by harnessing the power of economic expansion can we make strides in terms of land management, waste disposal, resource consumption, and energy usage.

8.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
  • Ensure that your examples are directly relevant to the point you are making.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the introduction could be improved to better introduce the topic and the writer’s position.

Suggestions
  • Consider rephrasing the introduction to make the topic and your position more clear.