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Some people think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing debate about childcare: whether child care centers can provide better care for young children, or if the family members, like grandparents are better suited in this role. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss both perspectives and present my opinion.
One significant advantage of the child care centers, like kindergartens, is the environment where the young children are given a chance to meet their peers. Socializing with each other, children can improve their communicative skills, enabling them to express their thoughts confidently. Apart from this, child care centers usually have a scheduled time plan which guides kids to have a daily routine, including meals, playtime, learning activities.
Despite this, I support the grandparents’ care for the safety of a child. The safety comes from grandparents’ familiarity to their grandchild. For example, the child may have a problem with allergies and he has to take medication in a specific time. The grandparents play a crucial role in sach case, allowing parents can focus on work with peace of mind. Moreover, another advantage of taking care of children by grandparents is that they do not demand payment compared to the child care centers. The children may be offered listening fairy tales, delicious meals, and the most important-love by their grandparents with no fee.
In conclusion, although child care centers may provide special atmosphere or scheduled time plans, I prefer grandparents’ service because of their familiarity and not costly

7.0

The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
  • Make sure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the points you have made in the essay.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be developed more fully in places.

Suggestions
  • Try to provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
  • Make sure that each paragraph fully develops a single point.