Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a view that government should abolish taxes and allow citizens to keep all the money they earn. While this suggestion sounds fair on the face of it, it entails several flaws. I therefore believe, the elimination of taxes is not the most sensible course of action.
Advocates of tax abolition are often critical of how the government funds are expended. It is not rare to see governments prioritize matters that do not serve the best interests of the public, and allocate excessive funds for projects of little to no significant impact. Space exploration can be a good case in point. The US government, for example, spent a whopping $250 billion on the moon expedition, with the public almost entirely footing the bill through its taxes. Such seemingly careless allocation of public funds raises question for many people about the necessity of paying taxes to the state.
In my opinion, however, taxes still remain an important element of a democratic and thriving society. It is through the taxes that citizens pay that government can perform civil operations. These services include but not limited to infrastructure development, education, healthcare, defense, and social welfare. If people were not obliged to pay taxes, this would be a major burden on government’s resources, preventing it from carrying out its responsibilities and providing essential services to the public.
An argument could be made that governments’ revenue streams are not limited to taxation and they can cover the funds for public services without relying on the tax-payer money. While this is true, these resources are not infinite and could be depleted as the population grows. If governments face constant revenue shortfalls due to tax evasion, they may resort to borrowing to meet their financial obligations. This can contribute to an increase in national debt over time.
In conclusion, it is true occasional misallocation of the tax-payer money can occur but to me this is not strong enough grounding to abolish taxes. Taxes help governments run the country, contributing to its overall functioning and maintenance.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Ensure that your arguments are presented in a clear and logical order.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.
The essay addresses the task fully and presents a well-developed response. The writer’s position is clear throughout the essay. However, the argument could be strengthened by addressing potential counterarguments more thoroughly.
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- Consider addressing potential counterarguments more thoroughly to strengthen your position.