Studies show that crime rates are lower among those with educational degrees. Therefore, the best way to reduce the crime rate is to educate criminals while they are still in prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
According to recent researches, lower crime rates have been recorded among the educated section of the population. So that, educating imprisoned criminals is seen as the most appealing way to decrease the crime rate. I partially agree with this viewpoint; though education for prisoners could help to figure out this situation, I still believe that after releasing, criminals’ behavior and environment are likely to urge them to commit a crime again.
On the one hand, it is clearly seen from studies that in order to reduce crime rates in society, educating criminals being in prison is proved to be helpful. Take Scandinavian countries (Norway, Finland, and Denmark) as an example where rehabilitation practices are held for criminals, such as they are able to get access to education or attend skills development programs. Indeed, in the above-mentioned countries, such initiatives work well, as numbers show how the crime rate is low there and criminals are less likely to return to their criminal behavior thanks to well-designed rehabilitating systems. This, in turn, leads to individuals become enable to control their own lives and economic stability.
On the other hand, despite having few cases where applying education for the reduction of crime makes sense, it raises a question: how suitable is it for a global scale? Around the world, there are some inequalities between countries in terms of socioeconomic situations, such as poor, developing, and developed ones. This is because putting everything into the same frame (educating) does not give us the intended result. In my opinion, for areas where criminal acts are deeply rooted in or living conditions are insufficient, released prisoners may find reintegration into society challenging not only due to the low economic opportunities but also because people around them, some being criminals, may prevent from breaking the cycle of poverty and crime.
To sum up, data show that educational attainment contributes to decreased criminal acts. Having criminals taught is one of the most proper ways to lower the crime rates in certain cases for sure, but not all the time. For some countries living below the poverty line, it is unlikely to be useful enough to stop recommitting the crime.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
- Ensure that your examples are directly relevant to the point you are making.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the counter-arguments.
Suggestions
- Consider providing a more detailed analysis of the counter-arguments to provide a more balanced view.