Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process by which leather products are produced can be outlined in a number of consecutive steps.
Overall, there are four main stages included in the process of making leather items. It starts with the initial drying of the animal skin, followed by delivering it to the factory. The animal skin goes through several steps of cleaning before they are polished to be ready to make accessories in another factory.
The animal skin goes through several steps before it goes through the cleaning process. Initially, after being dried outside, the skin is then delivered to the factory. In the factory, the skin is washed in water and added lime in it, which is then followed by soaking the animal.
The following stage starts with flattening the skin after which it is soaked again in water but with tannin. Before it is delivered to another factory, it is polished in a polishing machine. The last step is making the final products, including shoes, balls, and bags, in the next factory.
The essay is generally well-organized but has some repetitive elements and lacks clear comparisons.
Suggestions
- Use varied transitional phrases to enhance flow.
- Avoid repetition of similar phrases.
- Incorporate more comparisons between stages.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision in some areas.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and some clarity in describing the process.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between stages.
- Ensure clarity in the sequence of steps.