Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the estimation of population figures in two countries, India and China, over the five decades, 2000 and 2050, including the projected population growth up to 2050.
Overall, in the first decade, India, despite having fewer population numbers than China, is expected to witness substantial growth in the final year while China is predicted to diminish in the last three decades.
Turning to the details, in the first year India’s population numbers stood at 1 billion while the population number was almost 1.3 billion in China. In 2010, both countries had increased but India witnessed a dramatic increase by around 0.2 billion and China saw a change by 0.1 billion. The upcoming decade was nearly the same as it was in 2010 because the growth in both countries were as they were in the last decade.
According to predictions, population numbers will be equal in 2030 in both countries at over 1.4 billion. However, the position of countries which dominated the 3 decades is expected to reverse from 2040 by switching their positions that India gets in the first and China will be second. Regarding the last decade’s expectations, India will reach the top by standing at around 1.6 billion while China will decrease and will stand at 1.4 billion.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but some transitions between ideas are abrupt. The overall structure is clear, yet there are occasional lapses in clarity when discussing specific trends.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the comparison between India and China in each decade.
- Summarize key trends more effectively.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic. However, some word choices could be more precise, and there is occasional repetition.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.
The essay addresses the task by summarizing and comparing key trends, but it could provide more detailed analysis of the data.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points to support trends.
- Ensure all main features of the graph are discussed.