summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comperisons where relevant
The table compares changes in how many smartphones and computers owned by per thousand people in six different nations in 2003.
Overall, it evident that in Iceland people used phones more than other countries while San Marino’s popularity mostly used computers instead of phones.
San Marino, Chile, France demonstrated more personal computers than mobile phones. Among these countries, San Marino’s population used personal computer more, staggering at 720 and followed by France and Chile at 300, 100 respectively. France took dominance in smart phones through other nations at 200 while San Marino two times lower and Chile quarter lower.
Other remaining countries like Malaysia, Zealand, Iceland mainly owned phones more than personal computers. Iceland used more phones than other ones made up 900 and followed by Zealand and Malaysia at 550 and 250 respectively. In contrast, Iceland used phones more at 50 than Zealand made up 400. Malaysia’s people owned only 100 phones.
The essay has some organizational issues and lacks clear comparisons.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Make clear comparisons between countries.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and clear comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between countries.
- Ensure all main features from the table are reported.
- Avoid unnecessary repetition.