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The give linear graph provides the overall exports in clothing in 4 different countries from 2000 to 2014.All units are measured in percentages.
Overall,from the first glance,it is enough to make it clear that Even though The European Union,initially,was dominant in exporting clothes,China surpassed its competitors by the end of the frame time,witnessing the highest export rate.
Let’s commence by looking at first The European Union,in 2000,the proportion stood at just over 30 which was its peak point,but later the percentage for exports embarked on decreasing dramatically,reaching roughly 17 until 2014.As far as Asia(without China) is concerned,the export rate was 15 in 2000,whereas the following 8 years experienced a remarkable drop(15) which was followed by a minor growth up to 17 till the end of the period.
In 2000,It was China that traded clothes in the small amount internationally,in that year.Nevertheless,then the rate started to increase and went on rising until 2014,sawing the highest proportion for exporting clothes amongst these countries.In terms of the USA,this state sold the least garments overseas throughought the whole period,showing about 13 in 2000 and finished the year with a decline to 5.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the graph and makes some relevant comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations and by making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed explanations of the data presented in the graph.
- Make more specific comparisons between the data points.