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the table compares six different nation’s – Ireland, Japan, Korea, Poland, Portugal and the US the volume of waste productions ( in millions of tones) between 1980 and 2000. Overall, the US recorded the highest percentage and Ireland saw the lowest consumption over a twenty-year period. Additionally, all the indicators experienced an upward trend in 1980-2000.
European countries which are Ireland, Poland and Portugal saw a less consumption rather than other nations over the two decades. In Ireland, waste production began with 0.6 millions of tones in 1980, however instead of decreased it rose to 5 millions in 2000. In Poland, Portugal and Japan saw the same trend that an upward between 1980 and 2000.
In 1980, the US generated significantly higher indicators with 131 millions of tones, which was more than the combined total of the five counties. Additionally to this, American’s trend continued to increase in 1990 and 2000 and it peaked up 192 millions of tones in the end of the period. In contrast, Korea managed to reduce the waste production. The trend started with 31 millions of tones in 1990 and after a decade it decreased from 31 million to 19 millions of tones.
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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases that need to be addressed.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a variety of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that need to be addressed.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the table and makes some relevant comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations and by making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more detailed explanations and make more specific comparisons.
- Use a wider range of structures to discuss the data.