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Task 1

The line graph illustrates the medium monthly alteration and the prices of three different metals, namely : copper, nickel and zinc during 2014.
Overall, it is evident that the prices of copper and nickel exhibited a downward trend, with the exception for zinc, which increased. Moreover, the figure of nickel exhibited a dramatic decrease throughout the timeframe.
Focusing on the increase firstly.The price of zinc started at 1% in January, and then grew noticeably to 3% by February, which was its peak of all time. In addition, there was observed a marked decline to -1% in June. Furthermore, the figure of zinc leveled off from July till September at 0.5%. As well as, it recovered from – 1% in October to 2% by the final month.
At the same time, the figures of nickel and copper started at varying degrees with respective figures for 6% and 2% in January. Additionally, the percentage of nickel underwent a marked fall to -3% in June, but then recovered to 1% in December. Meanwhile, the proportion of copper dropped to 0.5% in March. There was a considerable rise to 1% in July, and then before increasing to 1.5% in December, the percentage of copper experienced a marginal decrease from 1% to 0.5% in December

7.0

The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good balance between the description of the three metals.

Suggestions
  • Ensure that the flow of information is not interrupted by unnecessary details.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary related to the topic is generally well-chosen.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. The errors that do occur do not impede communication.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is presented in a logical sequence and there is a clear purpose to the communication.

Suggestions
  • Ensure that you do not introduce any unnecessary symbols or characters in your writing.