Task 1
The line graph illustrates how many people participated in different activities from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film and martial arts groups experienced small changes over time. Table tennis saw the biggest increase, followed by music performances, while the amateur drama group experienced a significant decline.
Initially, the film group had the most participants, with around 65 people, followed by martial arts with 38. Both groups fluctuated slightly, with the film group dropping to about 60 in 2010 but recovering to the same level by 2020. Similarly, martial arts participation rose slightly to just under 40 before returning to its original number.
In contrast, amateur drama started with 25 participants, while table tennis had 17. By 2010, both groups had around 20 participants, but table tennis numbers rose sharply to over 50 by 2020. Meanwhile, amateur drama fell dramatically to just 5, the lowest figure for any activity. Music performances started with no participants in 2000 but grew steadily to surpass amateur drama by 2015 with 17 people and ended at nearly 20 by 2020.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The information flows smoothly, and there is effective use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. The vocabulary is used appropriately with some flexibility.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is accurately selected and effectively compares the data.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all data points are clearly and accurately described.