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Task 1

The bar chart illustrates how the average weekly spending of families in a single country shifted between 1968 and 2018 across various essential expenditure categories.
Overall, food, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, and personal goods have experienced a downward trend from 1968 to 2018. However, housing, transport, and leisure have grown over the given period.
In 1968, a considerable portion of the weekly income was allocated to food, accounting for approximately 32% of the total expenditure. By 2018, this figure had decreased to around 15%, suggesting a substantial decline in the proportion of income spent on food. Similarly, fuel and power witnessed a noticeable decrease, dropping from about 11% in 1968 to approximately 6% in 2018. Clothing and footwear also followed a similar pattern, declining from around 10% to 5% over the same period.
In contrast to the aforementioned categories, housing expenditure experienced a significant increase, rising from about 13% in 1968 to nearly 20% in 2018. Transport also showed a notable upward trend, increasing from approximately 9% to 15% over the same period. Leisure activities also saw a substantial growth, rising from around 4% in 1968 to 10% in 2018.

8.0

The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression of ideas. It effectively uses cohesive devices to connect information.

Suggestions
  • Ensure consistency in the description of trends by using parallel structures.

The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with precise word choice and appropriate use of terms related to the topic.

The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures accurately, with minor errors that do not impede understanding.

The essay effectively addresses the task, presenting an accurate summary of the data with relevant comparisons and trends.

Suggestions
  • Include more specific data points for other categories like household goods and personal goods to enhance completeness.