task 1 bar chart
The table gives information about how many households generated income yearly in the US between 2007,2011, and 2015.Overall,the number of US households generally increased , with the households which generated than higher than 100,000$ dominating throughout.Regarding medium class, there was a rise in the figure. With households which are lower than 50.000$ the number had no change.
With the increases, the number of households which produced 100,000$ or more grew significantly to nearly 34 from just under 30 despite falling( to 27 ) in 2011.In contrast , other households generating lower than 100,000$ witnessed a growth in 2011 from 25 and just above to nearly 30 respectively.In the end of the given period, the figure of medium class generally increased from nearly 25 to just above 26.
Notably,in the number of households which made 25,000$-49,000$ remained stable and households which generated less than 25,000$ followed a similar pattern. There was a slight decrease from approximately 15 to just under 14 in 2011,however the figure recovered to 15 in 2015.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a clear progression of information.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of the essay.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. The vocabulary is generally used appropriately with only occasional inaccuracies.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. Those that do exist are minor and do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also presents detail information and supports main points well.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all data is accurately reported and clearly described. Be careful with a using a term such as “medium class” or “higher than 100,000$”. These terms are not standard in this context and could be confusing. Consider rephrasing to “households earning between certain amounts” instead.