▎Task 1: Letter Write a letter to a local newspaper expressing your opinion about an environmental issue in your community. In your letter, include: • A brief introduction of yourself and why you are writing • The specific environmental issue you are concerned about • Your opinion on the issue and any suggestions for improvement • A call to action for readers or local authorities
Dear Sir or Madam
My name is Behruz Xumorov, a concerned resident of my city. I am writing to drow attention to a pressing environmental issue that has been affecting our community. For example, many public and environmental issues and they are causing pollution, infection, and other issues.
Over a few months ago, many large companies and factories led to pollution, in addition many cars used to petrol and poison gas. This petrol is causing infection and deads. I am worried about specific environmental issues. This issue leads to the deads of animals and people. This situation is sorrowful, and this issue not only affects public health but also contributes to global climate change.
I strongly believe these issues can be resolved. If we start electr cars, transportation and other natural things. Additionally, we are growing plants, trees, flowers, and other covers. So we safe environment and our city.
I think readers or local authorities can help to fix these environmental issues, I personally believe this public environmental issues are fixed as soon as possible.
Yours faithful
Xumorov Behruz
The letter has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the body of the letter is disorganized, with ideas not flowing logically from one to the next. The introduction of the issue is vague and the transition between sentences and ideas is abrupt, making the letter difficult to follow. The conclusion is also abrupt and does not effectively summarize the key points discussed.
Suggestions
- Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more clearly.
- Organize your thoughts in a logical order, possibly by using a structured outline.
- Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, with the introduction and conclusion clearly stating the purpose of the letter.
The letter uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are several instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. For example, “drow attention” should be “draw attention,” “pollution, infection, and other issues” is too vague, and “deads” should be “deaths.” The use of informal language (“electr cars”) is also inappropriate for this context.
The letter contains numerous grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. For example, “I am worried about specific environmental issues” is too vague and could be specified, and “If we start electr cars, transportation and other natural things” is grammatically incorrect.
The letter does not effectively communicate the key points related to the environmental issue. The writer mentions various issues but does not clearly specify the environmental problem or provide enough detail for the reader to understand the scope and significance of the issue. The introduction and conclusion are too brief and do not effectively summarize the main points discussed. The letter also lacks specific details and examples that would help to illustrate the environmental issues more clearly.
Suggestions
- Clearly define the environmental issue you are concerned about in the introduction.
- Provide specific examples and details to illustrate the impact of the issue.
- Discuss potential solutions in a clear and detailed manner.