Task 1. Question: There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to my complain about the public transport. Certainly, every day I use from this and I often meeting with several issues of the bus.
In fact, over the last few weeks, our region’s transports have a lot of misunderstanding. On of the most problem is about transport is old and its engine is not quality and broken. So that’s why, population suffer from waiting particularly, at the cold whether. This problem is impacting to other vehicles.
To be honestly, this issues have only negative impacts towards vehicles and people. To example, if I enter to public transport, I later arrive to my work, some people order the taxi. Especially, I was ill through stay at the cold.
I would give some suggests to you. Firstly, government should change some buses or a great master of engine should fixed the problem on the transport.
I look forward to your reply as soon possible.
Best regards
Asliddin Xushboqov
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The letter is structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is good for overall organization. However, there are some issues with coherence and cohesion within paragraphs and between paragraphs. For example, the transition between the first and second paragraphs is a bit abrupt, and the connection between the issues with the bus and the suggestions to fix them could be smoother. Additionally, the use of pronouns and other cohesive devices could be improved to make the relationships between ideas clearer. Overall, the letter is somewhat difficult to follow, and the meaning is not always clear. More specific details and examples could help to improve the clarity and coherence of the letter.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of the letter and make the relationships between ideas clearer.
- Provide more specific details and examples to support your points and make your arguments more persuasive.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The letter uses a range of vocabulary related to the topic of public transport, such as ‘public transport’, ‘population’, ‘vehicles’, and ‘cold weather’. However, there are some instances of awkward or incorrect word choices, such as ‘a great master of engine should fixed the problem’, which should be ‘the engine should be fixed’ or ‘the mechanic should fix the problems’. Additionally, the letter could benefit from a wider range of more formal or academic language to improve the overall quality of the writing.
The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect the overall clarity and readability. These include issues with subject-verb agreement, article use, and preposition use. For example, ‘I am writing to my complain’ should be ‘I am writing to complain’ and ‘On of the most problem is about transport is old’ should be ‘One of the most problems is that the transport is old’. Additionally, there are some issues with punctuation and sentence structure that affect the overall clarity and professionalism of the letter. More varied and complex sentence structures could be used to improve the letter, but it is also important to ensure that these structures are used correctly.
The letter addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the letter could be more formal in tone and could provide more specific details and examples to support the arguments. The letter addresses the topic by discussing the issues with the public transport in the region and providing some suggestions for improvements. The writer identifies several problems, such as the quality of the buses and the discomfort of passengers, and provides some suggestions for solutions, such as changing the buses or fixing the engines. However, the letter could be more formal in tone and could provide more specific details and examples to support the arguments. The writer could also consider addressing potential counterarguments to strengthen the overall position.
Suggestions
- Make sure to use a formal tone throughout the letter.
- Provide more specific details and examples to support your arguments.