Task 1. The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work.
The bar chart illustrates the reasons for not going to work in a certain European country between 2000 and 2010. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall, it can be seen that illnesses and family responsibilities are the main two reasons, while the reverse was true for stress.
In 2010, the percentage of absent workers due to disease was the highest at 45%, followed by family duties that stood at just under 35%. In the next 5 years, sickness proportions experienced a significant decline to 40%, further decreased by 5%, whereas figures for family responsibilities dropped to approximately 23% and remained stable in the final year.
In contrast, the proportion of employees skipped work day because of personal needs and unexpected problems was lower, accounting for 15% and 10%, respectively. In the subsequent 5-year period, both witnessed substantial increases; the former rose to about 22% before decreasing to 20% at the end of the timeframe, and the latter jumped to 17% and stayed constant. The percentage of employees absent due to stress was the lowest, made up just above 5%; this figure increased dramatically to around 14% in 2010.
The essay is well-organized with a clear overview and logical flow of information. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure consistent referencing of data.
- Clarify comparisons between years.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary accurately. Some expressions could be more varied to enhance the lexical resource.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures used accurately. Some minor errors are present but do not impede understanding.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons of the data. All key features are covered.