Task 2
There is a debate over which way is the best for living these days for population. From my point of view, it is better to reside in a city. It has some benefits as people live in a high standard life and the tecnogies is more modern .
There is benefits why most of the people select to reside in a countryside. First of all, they will exict in a clean atmosphere that could be influence to the human health. If people reside in rural area , they may do or buy anything . Moreover, it is freer life and they will eat healthy food . In the countryside is more comfortable and quiter. However, it has also some drawbacks. People will not have enough help like technology and they will also have to struggle more to get by. They will fall behind modern life.
While others believe that is better to live in a city centre. If people reside in a city, they will be exict in high standard life than others . It is easier to live in a city . For example, people will have many opportunities in any area of life or business and they will always have electricity to help them live. I prefer to live in the city better than in the countryside. However, if there is no electricity or gas in the city, it will be difficult for them to live. there will also be a lot of traffic jams on the streets in the mornings .
In conclusion, Despite the disadvantages of living in a village and a city, people choose their own. I choose to live in a city with these advantages and disadvantages.
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the progression of ideas a bit difficult to follow. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and clearly stating the writer’s position.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and clearly state your position.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary, with some attempts to use less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choices, which can detract from the overall clarity and effectiveness of the writing. Additionally, the use of more formal language could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling. However, these errors do not generally impede communication. The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures and there are some errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. These errors do not generally impede communication, but they can still be distracting. The essay would benefit from a thorough review to identify and correct these errors.
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. The writer discusses the benefits and drawbacks of living in both the countryside and the city, and clearly states their position in the conclusion. However, the argument could be more fully developed, and the essay would benefit from more specific examples to support the points made.
Suggestions
- Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is well supported by the rest of the essay.