The bar chart below shows the percentage of adults by age group in the UK who used the internet everyday in the years 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the proportion of daily internet users in different age groups in the UK between 2003 and 2006.
Overall it is visible from the chart that the highest percentage of internet users accounts for young adults, while the vice versa is true for those in older age groups. Almost in all years young adults dominated in terms of using the internet on a daily basis among any other age groups.
In 2003 and 2004, 4 in 5 people aged 16-24 used the internet daily. Despite going up to just under 90% in 2005, this percentage then experienced a slight decline by about 5% in the final year. Starting at about two thirds in 2003,the proportion of adults aged 25-44 using the internet daily increased gradually to 80% over the course of three years. The percentage of daily users of the internet aged 45-54 started at approximately 1 in 2, a figure that then rose to about 70% in 2006 with some fluctuations.
In the initial year just over 30% of people in 55-64 age group used the internet everyday and this was followed by a slight increase of about 10% one year later. In 2005 this figure stayed almost stable, before increasing noticeably to just over 2 in 4 in 2006. The proportion of adults aged over 65 using the internet was under tenth, but this was followed by a marginal increase to 20% in 2005.
The essay is logically organized with clear progression. There is a clear overview, and comparisons are made effectively. However, some transitions between sentences could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid overusing similar sentence structures.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some flexibility. However, there is repetition of some words and phrases.
The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures accurately. Some minor errors are present but do not impede understanding.
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing the main features and making relevant comparisons. The information is well-selected and reported.