The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The bar chart compares men, women and children in the UK on the basis of their consumption of the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in three separate years 2002, 2006 and 2010. Overall, all population groups followed similar patterns – after increasing significantly at first, their figures then reversed. Women always stood out with their higher numbers, closely followed by men while children exhibited considerably smaller figures during the period in question.
Focusing on the bigger numbers initially, the percentage of females eating the advised amount of fruit and vegetables started at a quarter, a figure that was slightly higher than the figure for males with 22%. While the former’s share reached 32% in 2006, the figure for the latter also increased, amounting to 28%. However, both genders saw their numbers decrease with respective figures standing at 27% and 24%.
Children, on the other hand showed rather smaller figures. Starting at 11 %, the proportion of children who consumed the recommended quantity of fruit and vegetables rose noticeably by 5 percentage point in 2006. The figure, however, reversed its rising trend, dropping slightly to reach 14% in the final year.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. However, some transitions between sentences and ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph transitions logically to the next.
- Clarify the relationship between ideas.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some repetition is present.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task and provides a clear overview of the main trends and comparisons in the data.
Suggestions
- Ensure all key features of the chart are covered.
- Provide a more detailed analysis of trends.