The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011.The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person household.
The graph compares the shares of male and female English resident within various age groups who lived in their own in 2011. while the Second chart provides data on how many bedrooms those
Lonely people had in their house.
Overall, As for the bar graph among age sets men living alone stood out with higher percentage rates than their male counterparts, especially the highest was 35-40 age bracket. However, the opposite patterns were seen among older age groups, those above 65. when it comes to the pic chart, it showed bigger portions in the number of houses with 1-3 bedrooms, while more than those was the least preferred.
The figures for lone women in England were significantly higher. The youngest each group in the graph presented more than 50% of females lived alone, while this figure was even higher in those between 25 and 34, with over 60%. The highest
share of English women living by themselves belonged to 35-49 age demographic at almost 65%,
However, Those within the ages from 65-74 possessed comparatively a smaller portion of less than 40%.
Looking at their lone male counterparts . They had lower shares in the given year. The ones at 85 and over made up the smallest share in the graph, at about 25% while the 75-85 age set rates a bit higher than the previous age category, with just less than 30%. Considering all age groups, there were more females where were alone than males of the same kind.
Moving onto the pie chart, more households favoured less than 4 bedrooms. The first place was taken by those with 3 bedrooms, at 35,4%. The was followed by houses with 3 bedrooms, showing 29,8 % of preference the third came families with one bedroom, rating 28%. In contrast, those with 4 bedrooms were considerably smaller in proportions, with 53% and 1,4% of household choosing 4 bedrooms and 5 or more ones, respectively.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The essay also makes some comparisons where relevant. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more comparisons between the data.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details to support your main points.
- Make more comparisons between the data to show the relationships between different age groups and number of bedrooms.