The bar chart gives information about the common activities children of different ages in the United States do as part of their bedtime routines.
The chart shows the share of most usual before-bed activities among three groups of children, namely: 1-3 years, 4-5 years and 6-8 years.
Overall, reading is the most referable activity among all groups, while watching TV and eating are the least common. Another noteworthy fact is that, while brushing teeth is the second ranked activity for the second and third groups, that for the first group is having a shower.
As for the most favorable activity, reading is more common for children in the second group, with respective figures at 65, 70 and just above 60 percent.
However, the second most preferable activity varied from group to group; while for the first group it is having a bath(40%), brushing teeth is for common for the second and third group, 45 and 50%.
The least common activities are watching TV and eating before the bed. Children in the second group, watched tv slightly more than the other two groups, 20 %.
The essay provides a clear overview and organizes information logically, but some transitions could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures but contains some errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, covering key features of the chart, but could provide more detailed analysis.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for clarity.
- Provide a more detailed comparison between groups.
- Ensure all main features are clearly described.