The bar chart gives information about the common activities children of different ages in the United States do as part of their bedtime routines.
The given chart illustrates data on the most done activities across different ages before going to bed in The USA.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that reading is one of the popular and leading habit for various aged kids while eating and watching TV are the less popular.
Children aged 1-3 mostly prefer to read before they got sleep and accounts for 60.Next on our list we have children who are used to having a shower or bath with a half being 40 .In the third place we can see kids accustomed brushing their teeth representing 30.Children in the age of 1-3 like eating more before they go to sleep and it is double more comparing with other age groups.
Children who are 4-5 year tend to read a lot and on the top list compared with other age ranges.In terms of Brushing teeth those eho are elder (6-8) Obviously brush their teeth more than other age groups.
The essay has a basic structure but lacks clear logical progression. Some points are not clearly linked.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid repetition of ideas.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors.
The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons.
- Ensure accuracy in data representation.