The bar chart gives information about the common activities children of different ages in the United States do as part of their bedtime routines
The bar graph compares the conventional activities that children belonging to different age groups do as a component of their bedtime routines in the United States.
Overall, reading, as is clear from the graph, is regarded as a popular activity among children, especially 4-5 years old, while eating remains uncommon for all age groups. Of particular note is that 6-8-year-old children are mainly involved in brushing, whereas 4-5-year-olds are engaged in reading activities in comparison to others.
Examining the most commonly chosen pastimes initially, reading leads the way. 4-5-year-olds who read before bedtime consist of 70, surpassing toddlers and 6-8-year-olds, as reading is performed by approximately 60 and 65 of them. Brushing teeth is also one of the most frequent activities, albeit followed by reading, which mainly attracts 6-8-year-old children. Although toddlers constitute nearly 30, 4-5-year-olds and 6-8-year-olds leave them behind by showing the numbers of 45 and 50. Children who are in favor of having a bath before bedtime are composed of almost the same numbers for all age brackets; three of them are well over 30.
With regard to the least common activities that are considered as part of the bedtime routine—watching TV and eating—they are nowhere near the aforementioned pastimes. Watching television is mainly performed by 4-5-year-old children, showing the number of 30; however, toddlers and 6-8-year-olds constitute lower numbers, well under 30. When it comes to eating, only 20 toddlers prefer eating prior to bedtime, while 4-5-year-olds and 6-8-year-olds show almost identical numbers (9 or 10).
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the comparison between different age groups. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more varied linking words to connect your ideas and sentences.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a variety of complex structures and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence construction.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data from the bar chart. The information is clearly and logically organized, with an overview of the main trends and significant details. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific data to support the comparisons and descriptions.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the bar chart to support your comparisons and descriptions.