The bar chart gives information about the common activities children of different ages in the United States do as part of their bedtime routines.
The bar chart compares the usual activities children of different ages in the U.S engage in before going to bed. Overall, reading, as is seen in the chart, serves as a common activity for most children, whereas eating is least popular among them. Brushing teeth comes second to reading. The number of children who are aged 6-8 years involved in activities, such as reading, having a bath, watching TV, and eating were lower in contrast to other children expect for brushing teeth where the substantial number is observed.
On the one hand, discussing the least popular activities among children in different age bracket, eating takes the lead. Toddlers who eat before bedtime are 20, whereas the numbers of 4-5 and 6-8 years old are substantially lower, constituting merely 10 and nine, respectively. Conversely, watching TV is almost identical, showing 20 of 4-5 years old children, which is the same as those of toddlers in eating sector. Watching TV among 1-3 years and 6-8 years old children is almost identical (around 16 each). Moreover, having a bath before bedtime is more common compared to aforementioned sectors. Precisely, toddlers take the lead again with 40, whereas 4-5 yeas old youth are 35, followed by 32 of older children (6-8).
On the other hand, brushing teeth as a common activity before bed is nowhere near as reading. As a sharp 30 of 1-3 years old children chooses brushing teeth, it is considered as least popular choice; however, the figures for 4-5 year and 6-8 year brackets are relatively bigger, approximately 45 and 50, respectively. Ultimately, reading is an outlier sector because of high numbers. 4-5 year children leave toddlers behind as 70 of them choose to engage in reading, while toddlers and 6-8 years old children are roughly 65 and 59, respectively.
The essay generally follows a logical structure but lacks clarity in some parts. Transitions between ideas are present but could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between paragraphs.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Avoid repetition of information.
The vocabulary used is appropriate but could be more varied. Some phrases are repetitive.
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are several errors that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing an overview and specific details. However, some comparisons could be clearer.
Suggestions
- Provide clearer comparisons between different age groups.
- Ensure all key data points from the chart are covered.