The bar chart gives information about the common activities children of different ages in the United States do as part of their bedtime routines.
The bar chart compares three different ages of children on the basis of common activities as a part of their bedtime routines in the USA. Overall, reading is by far the most prevalent bedtime activity among all the age groups in question, while watching TV and eating are the activities that are carried out by a significantly smaller percentage of them. Brushing the teeth becomes more common as children grow up, whilst the opposite scenario is true for the case of having a bath.
Reading exhibits far bigger figures as a part of children’s bedtime routine, with 70% of those aged 4-5 doing so before going to bed, closely followed the youngest age range (1-3) with about 65%, while the figure for the oldest ones makes up three fifths. Thirty percent of children aged 1-3 brush their teeth as a bedtime activity. This figure increases as they become older with 45% of the 4-5 age group following this routine, slightly less than 50% of the next age category (6-8). By contrast, the reverse is the case for having a bath with the percentages ranging from 40% to about 34%.
Regarding the activities which show considerably smaller numbers, the percentage of those aged 4-5 who watch TV before bed constitutes 20%, as opposed to the remaining age ranges whose figure stands at an almost identical 15%. As for eating, 20% of 1-3-year-old children include it in their bedtime routine, double that of the next older age group and this is closely followed by the oldest one with approximately 9%.
The essay is well-organized with a clear overview and logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions between sentences could be smoother.
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- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure consistency in comparing data.
- Clarify comparisons for better understanding.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary relevant to the task, though some expressions could be more precise.
The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures effectively with minor errors that do not impede communication.
The essay successfully covers the main trends and comparisons in the bar chart, providing a clear overview and detailed analysis.