The bar chart gives information about the levels of water in reservoirs of six Australian cities in October 2009 and October 2010.
The bar graph shows water levels, measured in percentages, in reservoirs across six Australian cities—Darwin, Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Perth, and Canberra—in October 2009 and October 2010.
Overall, four out of six cities experienced a growth in water levels, with Canberra exhibiting the most substantial increase, while the reverse was true for Sydney. It is also notable that Darwin and Brisbane bucked the foregoing trends.
Focusing on the higher figures first, in 2009, Sydney and Melbourne started at 70%, and both followed upward patterns, with the former going up to just over 80% and the latter reaching a chart high of 99%. Despite making up 40% initially, Perth’s water levels surged to well above 60% in 2010.
At the bottom end of the spectrum, Brisbane remained stagnant throughout the timeframe, at 55%. Accounting for 45% in the first year, the water levels of Darwin fell noticeably to roughly 38% in the following year, whereas that of Melbourne rose considerably from a chart low of 25% to 38%.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are some inconsistencies in the description of data trends.
Suggestions
- Ensure consistency in describing data trends.
- Use linking words to enhance flow between sentences.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some precision, but there are occasional lapses in word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear overview of the data with some minor inaccuracies.
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- Ensure all data points are accurately described.
- Clarify any ambiguous trends or comparisons.